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Okay so real quick here's the updated outline with less holes. Still has some holes but less than before. New stuff is underline

  Who is the protagonist?

   Dual identities who magically share the same body.
    o   Princess Yuzuki Mikazuki, aka: Sexy Magical Ninja Princess: She is completely aware of Fumie but due to her magic powers she literally cannot speak of or hint to anything related to her connection with Fumie or any knowledge of Fumie. (speak no evil to protect her secret id)

    o   Fumie Matsumoto: Fumie is completely unaware of SMNPs' and due to SMNP's magic powers she literally cannot comprehend anything related to or any knowledge of SMNP. (hear no evil to her from being used against SMNP)

  What is the situation? What is the hero’s personal condition at the beginning? How will that condition be changed, for better or worse, by the hero himself or by the antagonistic force?

    o   SMNP: Is a warrior magic girl with uncontrollable sexual urges induced from her magical powers of which she must learn to focus her energies to defeat the forces of evil.

    o   Fumie: A (college/post college/early career) party-girl who needs to grow up and be a woman.

  What is the protagonist’s objective? At the beginning, what does the hero want? What moral (or immoral) choices will she have to make in her attempt to gain that objective?

    o   SMNP: In the beginning she wants to destroy Queen Yvette and end her rule, avenge her parent’s death, restore her kingdom. To do this SMNP must decide to risk destroying the matriarchy society of Liliurus which she partially favors but detests the way Queen Yvette has brought it about and her plans to destroy all males across the world. / To prevent, intervene, or avenge victims of rape and other sexually base crimes.

    o   Fumie: Marry her childhood friend Derek and make him raise her children while she pursues her career. / Follow her late father’s footsteps in becoming a great martial artist

  Who is the opponent? Who or what stands in the way of the hero achieving his objective?

    o   SMNP: Queen Yvette and the Black Lily Warrior Clan. Yvette’s goal is completely wipe out the ‘male’ gender and have a world dominated matriarchy for the Iagladu and Earth realm

    o   Fumie: Roxie, Vivian, Mina and a bunch of other bitches cause undue drama and distractions in Fumie’s life and keep her for having a romantic relationship with Derek

  What will be the disaster? What misfortune will befall the hero as the result of her attempts to achieve her objective?

    o   SMNP: Black Lily Warrior Clan invade the Earth realm to capture or destroy SMNP and bring Queen Yvette’s rule to Earth

    o   Fumie: ????? (still not sure. may not be needed)

  What’s the conflict? What conflict will result from the hero’s reaction to the disaster? And what is the logical flow of cause and effect that will allow this conflict to continue throughout the story?

    o   SMNP: She must battle the Black Lilies and stop their invasion and save the Iagladu realm from total domination of Queen Yvette

    o   Fumie: She must overcome her own fears, demons and personal short falls in order to win Derek’s heart and be more to him than a ‘bossy little sister’.


The outline is not as complete as I think it should be but I feel like I need to keep things moving and I don't want to keep fuckin' around with this for too long. I know I just started yesterday but I feel like I gotta move or June could be here next week. But maybe I shouldn't fight that and it could be a good thing for me. So for now I'm going to sum all this up in a couple of sentence and then start on my Roughly sketch scene ideas. Got a ton of those. Should be a real good update.


Later!

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TheFwank Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2017  Professional Writer
Good work. :)
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GraphicBrat Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2017  Professional
Thanks!
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darrellsan Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
Ah so I'm only now just starting to wrap my mind around the totally epic idea that our dear lovable Fumie, who I always just considered a light-hearted, girls-just-wanna-have-fun sex kitten, is also the alter ego of the SMNP, and that Fumie's life is way more complex than I thought. Combining the two concepts is (for me) kinda like reading Cherry Poptart en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cherry_(…  and finding out that her alter ego is Tarot, Witch of the Black Roseen.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tarot:_W… .
So this should be very interesting to read when it's done!
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GraphicBrat Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2017  Professional
Yeah, there's more to our little sex kitten than I've fully disclosed. Kept a lot more to myself because I felt the slow drip of information would defeat the purpose of doing a comic. Fumie started out as my mascot then upgraded to my pet comic project that was on the same level as Cherry Poptart, just a big tit and ass girl who fucks and sucks her way through life. However I have a major need for character development and I can't run with a character if I don't know whats really going on in their heads. One reason why so many of my characters have been one shot pin ups. The ones you see more of are the ones I know most about. I still have other SMNP 'sister spirits' I haven't drawn yet cause I can get a feel for them.

SMNP at first was a one shot deal to mark a view count mile stone. But need I realized she could be much more and could add a great deal of substance to Fumie's story line. Granted SMNP is a sex kitten hero who fucks and sucks through out her adventures but it was more than what I had originally. I could not see Fumie going far as a comic on her own. It would had been like what I can sense about Cherry Poptart, she fucks a few guys here and there, you got some sub characters that do the same and then what, you got nothing to build on. SMNP added a another level to things that allow for bigger plots than horny girl at the club. When I watch tv or movies I sometimes like to imagine how my characters would interact with those on the screen and the situation at hand. I knew I really had something with SMNP when I kept seeing her in the adventures of other characters; established ones like the Justice League and OCs like your Blonde Marvel. This has prompted me to flesh out more adventures for her and more characters to interact with.

All this is why I'm so glad to hear about this challenge. I haven't thanked you for sharing this; Thank you very much! This is the structured set up I so desperately needed to work things out. I'm really excited about this and what I will make from this. I think you guys will be pleased.   
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BalloonPrincess Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2017  Hobbyist Filmographer
Personally, I think this ought to be very cool ... depends on the time period, culture, and other little details that you could play around with to make it extra special.  I'd be willing to buy a copy to see how this turns out.  :)
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GraphicBrat Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2017  Professional
Thank you.

The thing I'm fully coming to grip with is how much a femdom story I got here. I'm a big fan of femdom so I guess that why I snuck in so much of it subconsciously. Always knew I had elements but after putting it altogether I'm seeing it for the 'girl on top' story that it is. Was always worried about scaring off the few female fans I have but now I'm worried about the male fans. There will be plenty of 'guy/girl' sexy action but I'm wondering if the theme may be too much for most dudes.
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BalloonPrincess Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2017  Hobbyist Filmographer
As my mother used to say, Tell the story as you will and let the audience decide what they think about it.  :)
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